Comments from White Walls

Date Story title Comment
2017-11-14 18:46:39 Well, That Backfired Well, That Backfired 2 is out now; hope you enjoy!
2017-11-14 23:55:54 PICTURES of LILY This was truly excellent.
2017-06-29 19:20:49 Queen Yavara: Chapter Twenty-One @CandiCayned sorry about any spelling mistakes. I proof-read every chapter before submitting, but I miss a few things. Thank you for reading my stories for the plot; that's mostly why I write them. Chapters 23-25 should be out soon. I welcome any constructive criticism.
2017-07-03 17:10:36 Queen Yavara: Chapter Twenty-Five I'm sorry for any spelling and grammatical errors. I proof-read the chapters before I submit, but sometimes I still miss things.
2017-07-04 08:35:30 Queen Yavara: Chapter Eleven @Robsam1991 Thanks for the constructive criticism. I'd like to clear some things up though. The story is ultimately about Yavara's corruption and seduction to evil. She enjoys doing bad things because of the power it gives her. In chapter five, she has to be convinced by Zander to stop playing with Prestira's body after she gains control of her. Prestira is a willing participant in much of it, but I wanted to imply that Yavara revels in control and power, much like her sister. In later chapters, if you care to read them, you see Yavara delve deeper into her sadistic side. I thought I'd made the transition smooth enough, but I'm still fairly new to writing. Once again, thank you for your thoughts and comment.